Layout-25/25: I love this layout! The colors are very lively and inviting without making me want to wince and reach for my sunglasses. This is an imageless template, which usually I don't like, but I feel like nothing is missing from this layout, and an image would just make it look too busy and cluttered. I like the way it says "Munchkin's Journal" at the top, that really personalizes things. It lets your reader know that they aren't just reading John Doe's or Joe Schmoe's journal, they're reading your journal.
The 'back' and 'forth' links are amazingly simple and still unique. I might suggest adding a set of them to the top of the entry as well, so a reader doesn't have to scroll all the way down to the bottom of an entry that they want to skip at the moment. Other than that, great entry! Props to jdesign for making this layout, and extra props to you for picking it!
Content-40/50: At first I felt like the entry I was reading was a little confusing, but that's only because I hadn't read the entry before it. As I read more into it, I became more interested to read just how Tim responded to your actions. Your entry, especially the part about when you two went to McDonald's, made it feel like you were on a first 'date', and I could feel your nervousness through your words. I wanted to say, "Hurry, hurry! Eat the rest of the chicken nuggets before he gets back!" because I, and many other people I'm sure, know how it is to feel self-conscious when eating in front of somebody.
When you were talking about getting the phone call from Tim, I wanted to jump for joy with you. "Yay, he called!" I said to myself, knowing full well how terrible guys are about calling anybody.
I nodded my head in agreement when you said you couldn't sit still while on the phone with him, I'm exactly the same way.
I liked the fact that your entry was very detailed, as if you wanted to remember every single moment of that wonderful day. I'm sure you do. In my last review, I commented that sometimes long entries are a good thing, and this is one of those cases. You tried not to leave anything out, you seem to be very good at being completely honest with your audience. You realize that you are writing for you, and you don't censor yourself at all which I think is a good thing. What's the point in having a journal if you can't write exactly what you think?
I do understand the need for being locked, though, I know how it feels to live in a small town where anybody could find your diary and ruin you forever. Trust me, I know.
At times I was a little confused over what idea you were trying to convey in your entry, and I had to read over a few things twice to make sure I understood. However, you used good analogies which kept your entry entertaining and interesting.
A few points off for sometimes not being clear in your meaning, but otherwise, you did a good job!
Contact-5/5: E-mail, notes, g-book, I know I can find you if I need to!
Errors-5/5: None that I could find!
Navigation-5/5:Very neatly organized at the bottom of the page. Again, though, maybe think of somehow moving it to the top so the reader doesn't have to scroll? No points off, though, because that's just the way the layout was made.
Bonus-5/5:Only a few extras, And in the hair log I could only find one picture (but I'll give you the benefit of the doubt that it was my computer's fault and not yours). Very good poem, though! Maybe add a few more extras, but then again, the only people who have passwords to your diary are probably people who already know you fairly well, so I scratch that. Your extras are fine.
Would I read another entry?-5/5:Yes, I believe I've been here before and read some entries of yours, you tend to write a lot about Tim, but then again, we all tend to write a lot about our crushes. You don't update often, but that just means you have a life outside of d-land. When you do update, it's funny and worth reading!
Quote from Entry: "I about did a back flip, except I couldn’t because of the lack of space in the bathroom and, well, the lack of my agility."
Last Thoughts: Good entry, it really seems like you had a great day with Tim!
Score 90/100: Good job!
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